Source: Cabin in the Woods/Paradise
The “Sold” sign slowly disappeared
as my parents and I drove off. We were moving again, of course. This was the third time this year and all I
could think about was how many more times will I have to be thrown into another
school. A new place, new friends, and a whole new beginning, again. My parents
said this move will be different though, they called the new cabin an oasis in
the middle of a secluded forest.
As I looked out of the window at
the foggy landscape, I could feel my eyes yearning for sleep. I did not want to
miss any of the drive so I fought with all my might to stay awake. Just then I
heard the blinker on the car turn on and we exited off the highway onto Eerie
Forest Road. We were driving on the bouncy road as huge oak trees consumed the
sky above me. All of a sudden the car jerked forward as the car came to a
complete stop. My dad revved the engine, trying to free us from whatever had stopped
our car. As I looked out to see what it was, I could feel the car slowly
sinking into the mushy ground beneath us. It dawned on me. I quickly unbuckled
and yelled to my parents, “Quicksand!”. We jumped out of the car just in time
as the quicksand completely engulfed the car until all we could see was the
antenna poking out. We all stood in shock staring at the ground, trying to
figure out what actually just happened. We knew that the best way to fix this
crazy event was to head towards the new cabin and call for help, so we started
walking.
We walked for what seemed like
forever when my dad decided he needed to go to the restroom. With my dad gone,
my mom and I heard a murmur coming from the distance. As we waited and waited
the murmur got louder and louder. All of a sudden, my dad came running towards
us, screaming, with a large swarm of killer bees following closely. As I turned
to run, I noticed a stream of water. We all were able to make it to the water
and to escape the deadly stings of the bees. Just in time.
As we
continued walking, we finally made it to where the cabin was in sight. Just as
we let out a sigh of relief, we heard a chopping sound near the cabin. From
behind the house walked a crazy axeman screaming at us to get off his land. As the
man ran after us, we hid behind a large oak tree, breathing ever so softly. As
the axeman searched for us, I accidently moved my foot, causing the axeman to hear
where we were. He started chopping down tree we were behind. With the cabin
nearby, I went around the left side of the oak and yelled “Over here!”. As the
axeman quickly looked my way, my dad came out from behind the tree and tackled
the axeman, sending his axe flying away. We all sprinted as fast as we could to
the cabin, with the axeman right behind us. He quickly caught up to me, and as
he lunged forward to grab me, I woke up to my mom holding my arm as we arrived at
our new cabin. It was all a dream, nothing but a dream.
Author note: Written from the inspiration from Tom Gauld's Map of the Area Surrounding our Holiday Home. I started from the South, worked Northeast, and finally arrived at the cabin where the axeman was located.
Map of the Area Surrounding our Holiday Home, a cartoon by Tom Gauld from his book ROBOTS, MONSTERS Etc., 2006. http://onlinecourselady.pbworks.com/w/page/12763863/week1storytelling
First off, I liked the twist at the end of your story. Most of the writing I have read from other students in our class has been fairly straightforward. I also liked how your story actually matches up with the map from Tom Gauld that was your inspiration for the post. Thanks for sharing, I look forward to reading more of your work.
ReplyDeleteYou are a wonderful writer! I really liked how you started with something I can really relate to. I definitely had those same feelings when our family moved when I was little. Also, I love the cabin picture. Who does not want to live in a cabin in the middle of the woods! However, I was definitely not expecting the twist at the end haha.
ReplyDeleteHa! I loved this! Not going to lie, I was reading it thinking that this was the strangest thing and that you must really love action. Then it was a dream and the whole thing made since!! You are a fantastic writer. At first I thought it was going to be a horror story so I was a little hesitant to read it!
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Wow! Trevor this is a fantastic story with a great twist at the end. I think it is funny that you chose to do the same week 1 storytelling as myself, haha I guess great minds think alike. In addition, I loved the way you described the details of your story as you went along. The setting seemed to really stand out in my head and help set a visual image. Also, your picture seems very fulfilling for your story. It seemed to be almost the exact cabin in the woods I had imagined myself when reading your story. Moreover, like that your story follows along with a certain geographic location of the cartoon map by Tom Gauld. It shows your attention to detail. You have a great analytical mind and approach to storytelling. I am anxious to read more of your stories and I hope you keep up the adventure theme! Thanks for sharing!
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Hi again Trevor! Your story was a great read. I thought it was cool that you decided to do your story based off of a picture instead of a nursery rhyme. I did that too and I think that it lets you be even more creative with your story because there is almost no story line given to you in advance.
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to reading more from you!
-Sara